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Thursday, April 23, 2020

MAX'S lunch



Max the Dog

It was almost lunchtime for Max and his friend Mr Fuzzy Face, so they went hunting for some yummy food in the deep dark spooky forest. Later on, the cute fluffy kind and fierce Max found a massive smelly bone. The bone crunched while they ate the bone. Mr Fuzzy Face was fluffy strong big and cool, so he took sleepy Max home on his soft woolly back. Once they got home they had a nap.
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5 comments:

  1. AnonymousApril 23, 2020 at 4:41 PM

    Hi Jack
    Great writing I like the way you highlighted your adjectives.
    My dog is called Max, do you have a dog?

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    1. AnonymousApril 24, 2020 at 9:17 AM

      Hi Mrs Simanu, I do not have a dog but I do have a cat

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  2. Melissa LoverApril 24, 2020 at 8:25 AM

    Hi Jack,
    What great writing you have done this week. When you were reading it out I could tell you were very proud of your work. Your story is filled with adjectives which is awesome to see. Keep up the good work.

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  3. Michelle WrightApril 24, 2020 at 11:36 AM

    Hi Jack,

    You have written a very catchy story. All those great adjectives, have really helped me make a picture in my head,of what your characters looked like. Max and Mr Fuzzy Face sound like they are the very best of friends.
    Do you have any pets at home?

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    1. AnonymousApril 28, 2020 at 12:53 PM

      Hi Miss Wright, I have a cat named olive

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